OMG claire213

Eh, as soon as I saw so much repetition and redundancy in the first stanza I decided not to bother reading the rest. I will tell you that you ought ...

kk, nitpicks again ! :] --So why wait for the end itself when you can save yourself the trouble off all that suffering that comes with suspense. u've got an ...

Quick edits first! -"It's more than just a story to me, books are real, character are only fiction to those who don't know the magic or words." * forgetting an ...

the only things i have to say about corrections are spelling errors. (i.e. college*) and punctuation in a few spots. All together it was a bittersweet-ish short story. It was ...

It was short and to the point, which isn't always a bad thing. The cutting turn to it is a bit overdone these days... everyone is obsessed with writing about ...

After so many different people have nitpicked this through for you, i don't have much to crit on!! Very good. I really enjoyed this, and hope to read more of ...

I really enjoyed reading this. I will say, that as a poet, I'm not fond of poetry with a rhyme scheme, as in that not many people can pull it ...

i tried to get into this, but the style of writing is kind of choppy, there are some sentences that would fit and flow so much better if you used ...

Ah, i like this. Has room for growth though. I think some more line breaks would work wonders for the flow, with more punctuation. in the first stanza, i would ...

This starts quite nicely, with a decent flow. But you lose it at the second line of the 2nd stanza: "The rough-barked trunks groan and sigh like souls weary from ...